Alright third time now. My rough draft is done.

So I finally finished it and I would love some critique on it! I’m not too satisfied with the ending, but it’s due tomorrow, so I might have been a little more lenient with the writing aspect. Anyway, the concept I was trying to get across was this: That human beings created the gods. I tried to be rather subtle about it so it wouldn’t come across as ham fisted, but I’m not sure if I achieved that. Any critique would be good—whether it’s on dialogue, descriptions, characterization, etc. 

So here it is: The Court (You’ll have to read it off of tumblr because for some reason it wouldn’t let me include a break when I posted, and it’s really too long for other peoples’ dashboards.)

(If you have other title suggestions, that would be great as well. I’m absolutely awful at titling things.)

OK here’s what I’ve got so far.

I even incorporated some REAL SCIENCE that I’m actually pretty excited about for some reason. Anyway, this is an assignment for a class, so it WILL be finished.

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            The gilded dome shone with a dull yellow hue against the velvet cover of the night. Millions of stars watched over the golden city, and one rested atop the spire of the center dome. This star was a color unlike any hue in the visible light spectrum—its color could only be described as omniscient. To a human it would appear pink, but any god would laugh uproariously at that idea, and smite the human for his stupidity. This star was far too important to be labeled with a color. It was the star at the very center of the universe.

            Underneath the ever-watchful star, Azathoth’s Court was in full swing. The “Other” gods danced in their marvelous ways, and played a haunting tune on their flutes. At Azathoth’s left was his co-ruler, Yog-Sothoth, and at his right was Nyarlathotep. Nyarlathotep was perhaps the only lower deity not disturbed by Azathoth’s and Yog-Sothoth’s grotesque appearances. Though, he was quite disturbing as well—all Lovecraftian gods were.

            But the monstrous Lovecraftian gods weren’t the only deities at the Court. There were gods from all cultures and races in the universe. They mingled, making small-talk about wanting to be worshiped again, or complained about their followers misinterpreting their teachings. Jesus and Zeus were engaged in a loud, obnoxious conversation with the insect-like god of the Hrramfk race, from planet Amfk. Hera looked on contemptuously and shook her head. She ambled over to Sekhmet and Bastet, the Egyptian goddesses of war and motherhood, respectively. Sekhmet noticed her walking over and sneered and rolled her eyes.

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